i dont know if i like it so far... i like the story line, whic i cant tell you eyt, but i dont know if i like the start.
it really has nothing to do with religion, i'm not even catholic, but it is part of the story line. the main character will end up falling in love, which hes not supposed to, and will have to make a choice.
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Isaac was a devout Catholic who loved his Faith and thanked God for each sunrise he saw and every breath he took. He had been studying at Saint Peter and Paul Seminary for some time and was one year from being ordained. That Friday, after morning Mass, his spiritual Father and closest friend, Father Basil, told Isaac that he had been praying about him and he felt he should go to Albania as a missionary and spread God's word through helping those in need. That night, Father Basil and Isaac discussed the idea and prayed about it, knowing God's will would be done.
In the following week, they both continued to pray and also asked the others at the seminary to do so. The next Sunday, when Mass finished, Isaac went to the alter to find Father Basil. "I'm doing it," he said over the alter, "I've prayed about it--we've all prayed about it--and I know in my heart that I am to go to Albania." Father Basil looked up from what he was doing, "I thought you might." He said, folding the last of his vestments, "Come, we have much to do."
After a month of planning, Isaac was ready.
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thats all i got so far.
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HMMM...as far as the start goes, you might want to flesh out the beginning some...especially the first paragraph. There isn't really any dialogue, and it almost sounds as if you're relaying past information that really isn't important anymore. Know what I mean? More directly "involving" the characters would be more engaging.
But I do like it!
I always have trouble beginning stuff, and I usually never get past the first few pages or so...I've always found it easier to start with "action" of some sort, because I am more entertained writing to that, and I do the usual setting up and explaining on the way.
same here...i get bored with the stories in my own head as i write them down if exciting things don't happen straight away...
which is why i can usually only write flash fiction ^_^
i mean, think about it...pretty much any book that you read can easily be retold in mere pages without losing the basic storyline...
but enough of that...
i actually am a catholic (this has little to no relevance to the topic...just thought i'd throw that out there)...i think it sounds like a pretty good story line...i'm usually not into romance stories at all, but this sounds like its got some potential...
and may give me something interesting to think about during mass next sunday...
keep going, WS...i'd like to know how this turns out...
I like it, but I'd also try to show more and tell less. Best wishes!
i don't even think i like it... i might put it in the back of my mind for a bit and let it ferment... many things, like wine or collectables, get better with age... maybe in a bit it will be better by me thinking up stuff i didn't even know i thought.
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